Monday, March 1, 2010

Why? (part two)

why did she cry?
why did he die?
why did they give up on life?
why did ahe lie?
why does he still love?
why did he give up?
why did they drink?
why didn't they think?
why did she cheat?
"Why did she hurt me?"
why was he beat?
why did they kiss?
why is there blood on his wrist?
why do we live?
why dont we give?
why did he take?
why did she hate?
why are they fake?
why do teens have kids?
why is life.. the way it is?

4 comments:

  1. its actually a story, if you take out the "why" and make it a statement with the present or past tense... tell me what you make of the story :)

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  2. the pathos gets to the reader like the soft distant rain...

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  3. I think as poetry, it reads better. I just finished reading ur other blog & felt devastated at a girl writing about a mother & a man who forces himself upon her. Trauma!
    I think you write poems, beautifully...

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  4. thank you, i was thinking on making my other blog just short stories because i cant go any farther than two chapters. i have more to it, but its not as detailed. but thank you:)

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